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Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home .discuss the advantage and disadvantage of this development.

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is that several people are eligible to do their
chore
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chores
 from
home
due
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Due
 to
this
, they can save their commuting
time
 and fares for public transport.
such
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Such
 as there are both merits and demerits to
this
 trend,
although
 I am of the opinion that the former outdo the latter. There is a deluge of argument in favour of my stance. The most preponderant one is that individuals not only save their travelling
time but
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time, but
also
 maintain their cost of public transport. Needless to say, if they use their vehicle, they need to spend money on petroleum product which they can save in order to
work
 from
home
.
In addition
 to
this
, they can easily
work
 for anyone on any corner of the world while sitting in their homes as well as spend quality
time
 with their family members.
As a result
, the human being can spend
time
 with their family member sowing to
work
 from
home
. Notwithstanding all these merits, working for
home
 life is without concerns. On the one hand, people do not get the office environment to
this
 they can feel boring any
time
.
On the other hand
, employers can disturb in their homes because of the presence of their
families
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family
 members, which create a lack of focus on
work
 as well as difficult to their
children
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children's
 noise while working. In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that employers can save their
time
 and money due to
work
 from
home
.
Nevertheless
, its potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • commute time
  • stress
  • productivity
  • focus
  • face-to-face interaction
  • social isolation
  • work-life separation
  • distractions
  • discipline
  • dependence
  • technology
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