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The use of illegal drugs, such as heroin and cocaine, are becoming more and more common in many countries. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Drug
abuse
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 is becoming increasingly serious in many nations.
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 drugs threaten many societies, their effects can
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 be combated successfully.
This
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 essay looks at some of the problems caused by drug use on society, and suggests some solutions to the problems. Drug
abuse
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 causes multiple problems for countries and communities. The medical effects are very obvious.
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, addicts
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 their bodies and neglect their health, and so eventually require expensive treatment or hospitalization. In some cases,
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 as Marilyn Monroe, a drug overdose even leads to death. The
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 effect is
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a crime
. People who take drugs become crazy and irrational and often cause harm and danger to themselves and others.
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, the menace of drugs can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle
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 issue. People need to be aware of the effects so that they can avoid
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 problem.
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, the government could
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 use infomercials to educate their citizens.
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 is a good approach because they can alert all citizens about the negative aspects of using drugs. In conclusion, drug
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 is a serious issue because it causes harmful effects on people’s health and people who are high often commit crimes. The best approaches to deal with it are to educate people about its damaging effects, and
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 for the government to ensure all people are aware of the consequences through public service advertising.
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 the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term these are concrete steps to reduce the effects it is having on the current society.
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