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some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #level #education #schools #universities #time #facts #skills
The presented three pie charts compromise the amount of Australian people’s after-graduation condition
from
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of
 secondary school in three different categories from 1980 to 2000 in percentage unit. Overall,
unemployment rate
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the unemployment rate
 in Sweden had lowest record during
this
 period while
further
education
 and employed rates were competing together and the latter one had the upper hand. 1980 was the only year that higher
education
 data
were exceed
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exceeded
 to those of employment with 50% and 40
% respectively
Accept comma addition
%, respectively
, while
unemployment percentage
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the unemployment percentage
 was accounting for the minority of proportion with one a tenth percent. After 1980, the population of employed people increased from exactly a half in 1990 to 55% in 2000,
on the other
hand students
Accept comma addition
hand, students
 seeking for
education
 were experiencing a reduction in
this
 interval. In 2000
further
education
 and unemployment submitted its lowest record with 37% and 8
% respectively
Accept comma addition
%, respectively
, whereas
employment rate
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the employment rate
 was
on
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at
 the peak with slightly over a half.
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