The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Today tend to online shopping to be
increase
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increasing
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among
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fact, in
industrial
world internet
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world, internet
to
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perform
a key role in human life
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so many of
businesses
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the businesses
to be based on the net
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Nowaday electronic
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Nowadays, electronic
Nowadays electronic
business is part of the
world business
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world, business
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because without any border they can trade with each other
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and help to buy their goods more easily than the past
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I disagree with
this
idea that it leads to closing stores
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Firstly
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post industrial people must work more
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with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
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pews
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so they spend more
time
to work
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and
time
more valuable
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In
fact people
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fact, people
they do not have
enought
as much as necessary
enough
time
to go to shopping
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so they prefer to buy primary needs on the net like foods
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vegetables
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and
somthing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
else
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Secondly
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online shopping gives more opportunities to customers to compare with goods
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and choose
best deals
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the best deals
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For
example between
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example, between
to
being one more than one
two
brands of electronic devices you can compare
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and buy the best
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In fact
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on the net you do not have any limits to describe your goods
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conclusion
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shopping online helps businesses to improve their quality
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and help them to offer best deals to costumers
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Shopping online results in saving
time
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and money
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and people
hve
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
more chances to find products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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