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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary

#salary #job #satisfaction
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There is a tendency between among of people to prefer how to earn much money while others are looking for suitable jobs for them
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In my opinion I completely agree with people seeks
interest
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an interest
 in the type of the
work
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 of all, I believe that
job
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 satisfaction gives people a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 that no
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
 can guarantee.
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,
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 even if someone is
earing
the act of consuming food
eating
earning
wearing
 a high
salary
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,
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 feels happy in
short time
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a short time
 and
this
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 person won'
t
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 enjoy his life. To illustrate
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, I have two sisters
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 All of them have a private
job
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. One of them is creative in her
work
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 and she doesn'
t
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 matter for her
salary
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Till she got a big passion in my country
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her
of a female
Her
salary
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 has become high
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The reason is due to her love to her
work
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. While anther sister still receives the highest
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salary but
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salary, but
she didn'
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she didn't enjoy
t
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 enjoy in her
work
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, it hasn'
t
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 been upgraded in her
work
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. That's why it's important to choose the kind of
work
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 that makes you happy
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 look only at a high
salary
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,
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, I think doing what you like keeps you
motived
provided with a motive or given incentive for action
motivated
motives
 and
therefore
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 leads to a career growth. There is a strong relation between
job
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 satisfaction and productivity. People who love their
work
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 can easily excel in their fields of
work
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 and achieve better results than those
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 who put a high
salary
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 in
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first place
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the first place
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, my father decided to quit his
job
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 despite the good money that earns his. And after enduring years of ups and downs with his company
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 After that, it became one of the most famous companies in my city.
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, the advantages of jobs that keeps you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low a
salary
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. To conclude, I strongly believe that
job
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 satisfaction is more beneficial than a high
salary
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 because it makes people happy and
motived
provided with a motive or given incentive for action
motivated
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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