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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Therefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a tendency
between
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among
 students
,
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 some of them prefer to wear clothes Depending on their opinions, While others wear the same clothes the
while
all of something including all its component elements or parts
whole
 year. In my view point
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I completely with students who worn fashionable clothes in their schools.
First
 of all
,
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 the interest in the wearing clothes and following fashion has many effects for students. The most important impact
is keeps
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keeps
is keeping
has kept
 you existed for presence to your school every morning. Some private schools in my city force their students not wear uniforms. The reason is due to encourage to go their schools lovely. On
other hands
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the other hand
other hand
, students who wear
uniforms
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uniform
 clothes feel bored and probably their absence may become much and
this
students
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student
 won't enjoy in their studying. That's why it's important to wear fashionable clothes that makes you beautiful feeling than depends on one clothes to wear the whole year.
Secondly
, there is another impact is student grades. Wearing clothes differently everyday
,
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,
this
 it helps
thought
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to think
 growth. And your mood is above excellent.
For example
, when I was in high school, My boss
put
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puts
 open day for us
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,
 which is we can wear anything that depends on our mood
.
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.
The reason is due to test us for educational level and
compare
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compared
comparable
 to previous days. Indeed
,
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 in open day has become more productive and has got us higher scores. The advantages of wearing fashionable clothes keep students concentration in the study more. To conclude, I strongly believe that no using the same clothes everyday makes students love to study more and their high score.
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