Some people argue that technological inventions such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive . Do u agree or disagree ?

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According to some, modern technologies like cell phones are the reason for an isolated society. I completely agree with
this
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statement as I believe that these advancements are bringing a lot of negative impact
in
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on
the society.
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of all, there is no doubt that these inventions have brought dramatic changes and made our
life
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much easier than we ever anticipated. In the early 90s where mobile phones were just used for making
calls but
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calls, but
now it is
totally different scenario
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a totally different scenario
. They are not only used for making emergency calls, but
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for surfing internet, listening music, playing games and many more.
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, it has become an integral part of our
life
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. These smart phones are convenient and can even store our office files and other useful documents.
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, people of every age are addicted to using it.
For example
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, in the past, children used to play outdoor games, make more friends and had a social
life
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. But now they are busy playing video games alone.
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Similarly
, adults used to have more family gatherings, chat with each other as it was the source of
entertaintment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
. But now there is no social
life
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as
such
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.
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, in the
past there
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past, there
was
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were
no social media for communication and entertainment. People had to write letters
for
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to
the loved ones.
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created a special bond between family members. But with
advent
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the advent
of these smart phones, our social values are degraded as well.
Although
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we can instantly communicate, we have taken
this
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boon as granted. Even during family meetings we rarely share that bond as everyone is busy with their smart phones.
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, these mobile phones
has totally snatched
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have totally snatched
our social
life
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and made us a victim of loneliness. In conclusion,
although
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these smart phones are convenient and made our
life
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easier, it
also
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has become the main reason
for
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of
the isolated and segregated society.
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