In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

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As scientific and technological leaps are thriving in the modern society, people’s appreciation for those who practice in artistic field is still incredibly admirable. While there is no denying the priceless value that the arts bring, it is irrefutable that the arts could successfully reflect certain aspects of our lives which could not be conveyed by science and technology. In the

first

place, arts is almost an omnipotent tool in terms of facilitating the mental side of individuals. Music could perfectly exemplify

this

. People in the time of depression or dismay usually seek music as a remedy relieving their sorrows. By the same token, when they are in joyous moments, music could

also

amplify

this

with uplifting beat. Simultaneously, a picture painstakingly drawn depicting,

for example

, the excruciating pains that previous generations had to suffer from the World War I could instill a sense of sympathy into viewers.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that businesses should provide sports facilities foremployees. Others consider that a person’s health is their own responsibility, not a company’s problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think it does not matter if a professional sportsman or sportswoman misbehaves on or off the field if they play well. What is your opinion about this?

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion？

Levels of consumer debt are increasing across the world. To address this, a new subject should be introduced in secondary schools: how to manage personal finances. To what extent do you agree with this statement?