The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
diagram illustrates how a wave-energy machine
works and its location.
As could be seen this
machine
has to be located in the sea which
the bottom side of the Correct word choice
and
machine
should be underwater, and the above side of it should be in encounter with airflow
from the sky.
This
machine
has two turbines, electricity
generator and some Correct article usage
an electricity
section
in order that the air could flow in and out.
The bottom turbine is in Fix the agreement mistake
sections
encounter
with Add an article
an encounter
the encounter
this
cycle, which is by the time that the waves enter the machine
, the water levels and the air flows up which is coloured in red, in the other side the airflow
from the out section
that is
coloured in green moves down, and the turbine starts to work by the airflow
from the above section
and the bottom section
.
Another turbine works by entering the airflow
that is
coloured in
green from the sky, and the Change preposition
apply
airflow
, that is
going out of the machine
that
is coloured Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
red.
The final product of Change preposition
apply
this
machine
is the electricity which is generated by an engine.Submitted by shad va on
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