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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times, and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Generally, books are read for two reasons either for educational or leisure purposes.
Although
 it is thought that students spending time on entertainment books is a waste by some parents,
however
, personally, I believe sometimes it could be helpful and full of information. Fun books
such
 as novels are very informative and good source of informations,
for instance
 if you read one of dan brown books you will get alot of new informations about places and cultural landmarks so it is not completely bad, but only if it does not divert children attention from school or homework
then
 entertainment books would be an additional source of knowledge that will enrich their perception and widen their horizons. Another point to consider, when your child is reading books for fun that would be a better alternative than playing computer games or any video games which is a giant waste of time and it can
also
 hurt their eyes,
for example
, it is well known that a child who read books for fun is smarter than the ones who lose their times in video games.
However parents
Accept comma addition
However, parents
 should monitor their youth not to get addicted to entertainment books
instead
 of educational books,
In addition
, it is important that parents become sure that these books are not stopping children from being socially integrated and spend time with their families. In conclusion, reading books for leisure has a lot of advantages, but only if does not disrupt a child's education or distract them from their social life.
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