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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides

#people #internet #communities
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Internet
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The internet
 is the most influential and
pathbreaking
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path breaking
 innovation of
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 modern era. In fact, it changed everything in our lives. Communication to education these days it is involved in everything. We can see and talk to the people who are in other side of the
world
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. Some people think
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 made people closer, while others believe it is increasing the gap between the people. I will discuss the major points that support both arguments in
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 essay with a few examples. Prior to
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internet era
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the internet era
, It is hard to communicate with people staying in other countries. The telephone is the only option for people to communicate, but
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internet
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the internet
 is a game changer. It provided a chance for everyone to see other using their mobiles or computers. Any time anyone at any place can talk and see their family members, which is a great feet of technology. With broad communication it
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 provided a chance to meet new people in social media. It is a great advantage to improve our relations with others. It's very hard to imagine the
world
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 without
internet
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 today. There are some pitfalls, that can easily overwhelm the advantages
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internet
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Internet
. Few people are always engaged with
internet
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 and social media,
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this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
 making them isolate from the real
world
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.
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Internet
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The internet
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also have
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also has
has also had
 a
lot
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 of inappropriate content that spoil kids. There are a
lot
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 of measures taking by the governments to ban those websites. A
lot
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 of reports show that how
internet
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 is affecting the social relations. To conclude, We should take care of another person who is
next
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 to us and we should be in the part of the real society rather spending a
lot
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 of time in a fake
world
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