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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides

#people #internet #communities
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 is the most influential and
pathbreaking
Suggestion
path breaking
 innovation of
this
 modern era. In fact, it changed everything in our lives. Communication to education these days it is involved in everything. We can see and talk to the people who are in other side of the
world
. Some people think
this
 made people closer, while others believe it is increasing the gap between the people. I will discuss the major points that support both arguments in
this
 essay with a few examples. Prior to
internet era
Suggestion
the internet era
, It is hard to communicate with people staying in other countries. The telephone is the only option for people to communicate, but
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is a game changer. It provided a chance for everyone to see other using their mobiles or computers. Any time anyone at any place can talk and see their family members, which is a great feet of technology. With broad communication it
also
 provided a chance to meet new people in social media. It is a great advantage to improve our relations with others. It's very hard to imagine the
world
 without
internet
 today. There are some pitfalls, that can easily overwhelm the advantages
internet
Suggestion
Internet
. Few people are always engaged with
internet
 and social media,
this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
 making them isolate from the real
world
.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
also have
Suggestion
also has
has also had
 a
lot
 of inappropriate content that spoil kids. There are a
lot
 of measures taking by the governments to ban those websites. A
lot
 of reports show that how
internet
 is affecting the social relations. To conclude, We should take care of another person who is
next
 to us and we should be in the part of the real society rather spending a
lot
 of time in a fake
world
.
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