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University students always focus on one specific subject, but some people think that universities should encourage their students to study a wide range of subjects in addition to their own subjects. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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University education is a primary resource for one’s career prospects and holistic growth in academics.University’s learners mostly emphasis on major
subject
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 While some individuals opine that university should promote a variety of subjects with the specialist
subject
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. As per my perspective, I partially agree with
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 aforementioned information and will elucidate my views in the upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples. The most plausible reason is studying one
subject
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 enable students to devote them to a particular area and seek to become professional in the specialized field. To exemplify, learning subjects
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 as law, medical and engineering
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 the huge syllabus and require years of theoretical and practical training to become master in one
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. Students can acquire more practical skills and knowledge if one’s study only one
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, which potentially enhances
opportunity
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the opportunity
 in one’s career and proves as beneficial for mankind.  On the flip side, universities should promote all subjects and explain students to improve their career prospects by learning various subjects. The society needs those employees who possess various skills.
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, if everyone opted for computer science, students completing that course will find it difficult to get jobs resultantly the demand for other subjects will increase. Learners are inculcating various skills that would help learners to take up jobs in other courses and learn multitasking skills which make learners become an all-rounder. Conclusively, I  believe that universities should teach the major
subject
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 to support their individual growth of learners, but  study  all subjects ease the tension and stress of academics on the scholars.
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