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Nowadays because of digital technology it is possible for not only studios but also individuals to produce their own films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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These days, it is often suggested that films are not only can be produced by studios, but
also
 by ourselves due to the development of digital machinery. In my opinion, each decision has its own pros and cons. In
this
 answer, I will discuss both view about
this
 issue. In
this
 advanced and modern society, machinery is one of the most important and useful things to our life. Devices like phone, laptop can do everything from learning to work, or even making films with some easy steps.
This
 development,
firstly
 helps saving a large amount of investment in producing movies
such
 as renting equipments and photographer funds.
Besides
, our own videos could make with our own interests, don't have to depend on the filming crew. You can record yourself, use your own camera and choose your favourite costume.
Additionally
, shops which are selling cameras could have a chance to achieve interests.
On the other hand
, the moderns of machinery are now causing mass-unemployment problem in a host of countries. Studios are recently loosing their customers because of the rising of digital automation. Take an example, there are many photographers are
cut
Suggestion
cutting
 back due to the reasons listed above, sponsors are not excepted from the unemployment problem. In conclusion, I personally think that living in an advancing technological life has its own advantages and disadvantages.
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