In order to be successful at a sport, some think you must be physically strong while others believe mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Although
some people believe that a great number of people must have physical power for success in
sport
, others assert that mental
strength
plays significant role in achieving success. In my opinion, I consider that people who want win in
sport
events have excellent physical power.
First
of all,
physically
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physical
strain is needed to improve by sportsman every day for getting
first
place in the Olympiads and I agree.
This
means that athletes who want to obtain the gold medal should increase running, stretching and
quick
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quicker
.
For example
, Russian sportsmen who participate in
sport
events
such
as Olympiad always have big physical power. Without physical
strength
, many people do not achieve excellent results in different sports activities.
This
means that reaching
result in
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a result, in
a result in
sport
can
depends
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depend
on physical
strength
all people.
On the other hand
, many people think that mental
strength
can help in gaining success in
sport
.
On
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In
other words, many sportsmen know how to
focusing
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focus
and concentrating on their victory under of competitors.
For instance
, people who
have concentrate
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have concentrated
mental
strength
they do not pay attention on different provocation of competitors. Without mental
strength
, many sportsmen cannot find
new decision
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the new decision
in reaching results in sports
activitis
any specific behavior
activities
activity
.
Thus
, mental
strength
helps in
stressful situation
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stressful situations
a stressful situation
and adopts decision. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that
physical
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physically
strong
to exert much effort or energy
strain
is
important part
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an important part
in wining match of sportsmen.
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