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tourism is an ever growing industry What benefits do you think tourism bring to individuals and society

#tourism #industry #individuals #society
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Due to the globalisation, everyone can easily travel to other continents of the world from their home
country
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, Which fostering the
tourism
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. Due to
this
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,
tourism
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 is augmented day by day in many countries.
Tourism
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 gives a lot of immense married to the individuals and the society, which I can portray in the subsequent segments.
To begin
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 with, there is a
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extreme excess
plethora
tourism
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 is an ever growing industry of benefits, which
tourism
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 gave to
individual and to
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the individual and to country
country
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. Predominantly,
tourism
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 can give is the lucrative benefits to the host
country
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, in terms of booming the economy of the
country
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.
For instance
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, India is
destination
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the destination
 of the many
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tourist
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tourists
, because of its cultural Heritage.
Hence
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, a lot of travellers visit the Indian in a day.
Hence
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, the economy of the
country
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 is growing.
Moreover
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, it can
gives
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give
 the employment to the unemployed people
such
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 as and guides, drivers
etcetera
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. Through
this
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, it can solve out the problem of unemployment and gives the opportunity to the people to earn their bread and butter. Leaping
further
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, it can give the liberty to the people to know about the things which are prevailing in all over the world.
Besides
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this
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, it gives the opportunity to the
tourist
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 as well as the dweller of the
tourist
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 destination to interact with each other. So, they know about their culture and lifestyles of each other. Apart from
this
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,
tourist
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 can acquire the knowledge about the cultural heritage of the host
country
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 and local dwellers can improve their communication skills by
communicate
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communicating
 with them. To recapitulate, everyone has their own view, I do not deny any of them. I cogitate that, it gives the immense benefits to the host
country
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 as well as provide job opportunities to the dwellers of the
country
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.
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