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Computers have become so advanced and interactive that student in the future will have no need for a human educator in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree? Why not?

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Owing to the advancement in computers are getting more popular from
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last two decade
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the last two decades
last two decades
. It is undoubted that any sector of society doesn’t find
necessity
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the necessity
 of the computers. It
also
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 seems that
education sector
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the education sector
 is one of them. Some people believe that due to improvement in technology of computers, there is no need of teachers to educate children.
However
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, other people argue opposite to it. In my opinion, computers
can not
can not
cannot
 take place
of
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in
 a human’s brain so I believe that learn teachers are necessary in
classroom
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the classroom
classrooms
 to educate students. There are innumerous advantages of computers. Computers can give enormous types of information, solve any difficult calculation in no fraction of seconds. Despite of having
such
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 advantages, how to use the computer related programs can be
learn
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learned
by
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from
 teachers only. The computers can give methodology and solutions.
Faculty
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The faculty
 knows the understanding level of student and with respect to that they teach student using different methods. Some students
also
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 excel in
study
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the study
 by appreciation from educators. It is very obvious that human to human interaction is stronger than human to machine. Teachers can use the computers to make
learning process
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the learning process
 interesting as per example, with PowerPoint presentation they can explain any difficult topic to student by using animation and
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 presentation. Teachers might have
change
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changed
 their conventional way of teaching in order to use
latest
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the latest
 methods using computers. In conclusion, I opine that computer is
useful machine
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a useful machine
 for
education but
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education, but
 it can not be substitute of the teachers.
Teacher
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The teacher
 plays vital role in
children learning process
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the children learning process
.
and
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And
 so, by learning from teachers should continue in future.
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