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People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parents bring them up. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Children are stepping stone of every province It is taught by folks that young people achieve prosperity in their soul according to appearing of their birth giver.While I disaccord the reasons they are doing work hard along with societal impact more for getting goals in heart. One of the major reasons is that since most of parents are stepping out for giving better growth of their offspring from few years owing to they allocate their most time with their friends as a consequence, they learn a plethora of thing from them and they are starting those things which are followed by their peers. If they are joining good a company of people than they get their dreams easily than encounter plenty of problems.To epitomize, it was published in the article about 80% of juveniles followed equal habits according to their friends environment.
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, friends or the world after the family due to they put more impact on them because family members have not time for them. Admittedly, doing task hard in activity which is helping to receive name and fame
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 so when a person does job harder than learn new things in their heart.Those things are helping to become successful in their life.To example Narinder modi he is the prime minster of India and he lost their birth giver in 2 years of the age and he is one of successful person who got success just by struggle hard.
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, without work hard win may not possible because a myriad of individuals who learn new things just by experience. To conclude
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even though work hard is a key of success, but without good society, it is difficult for a child who always guide them about lucrative things.
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