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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays
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 has become an integral part of people's lives. There is no denying
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 the fact that people are becoming exceedingly dependent on information
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 over-reliance on
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 has some negative points, in my view, the pros of using IT overcome any drawback. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and provide some reasons to support my opinion. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages. One of the main benefits of the dominance of information
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 is that it can make life easier. Indeed, prior to the advent of
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, both working and studying used to be hectic and tedious.
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, the internet
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is giving
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access
 to numerous resources these days, which can enhance your work or study performance.
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, students and workers can get different perspectives for solving particular problems all around the
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, with just a click.
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,
technology
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 has made the
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 a global village, which people can be in touch with anyone from the comfort of their own home, and
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 they can have information about any part of the
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, people from India can have knowledge of U.S foreign policies within a
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, we all have instant access to
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the Entertainment industry
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, various types of songs, shows, games come to serve in front of our screen. Turning to the other side of the argument, one of the biggest downsides of
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 is that it may lead to an unhealthy lifestyle. The reason is that people are engaged on their computer and smartphones in their free time rather than doing any kind of physical activity.
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, it pushes
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people
a person
 towards isolation.
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, people are connected to the
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 they seem to lose human contact slowly in that these days, everybody is occupied by
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, and no one has time to have face-to-face interaction.
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, in the long run, it may make a person despondent. All things considered, there are some negative aspects of the
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, its benefits outweigh its disadvantages. Personally
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 I think it should be used sensibly and people must take regular breaks from
technology
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