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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discus both view d gives your opinion.

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It is often argued that the state is squandering the capital on arts
instead
 of other facilities: healthcare, education and so on, which is said by some people.
However
, I disagree with
this
 viewpoint, because the
art
 playing a critical role among those who are artists.
This
 essay will consider the circumstances behind
this
 phenomenon. Perhaps the most important cause is that it reflects the culture of a nation and enable
to
being one more than one
two
 peoples' understanding of their culture and tradition.
This
 means that every nation has their over culture and architecture. There are many historical buildings around the world. People go to see these buildings, as it helps to know about other cultures.
For example
, the article on 'The Time' published that almost 80% people travel from one place to another place in order to get information about other cultures.
Moreover
,
art
 is very important among artist, it aids to bring out the talent of the people. Artists
such
 as dancers, singers have lots of fans. Their shows are watched by thousands of people.
Such
 events provide provide employment to lots of people. Without the support of the government
art
 can die down and that will lose to the country economically. It will
also
 detrimental increase the unemployment rate.
For instance
, various studies conducted that it is detrimental an issue the society, if the authorities do not pay. On the flip side, there are other things that the government has to donate the money on education, healthcare and many more. These things are still vital. Even if the state provides the capital to these provisions, they can earn money. To conclude,
although
 the government should employ the money other amenities to make life simple of people,
art
 is very important, which assists to bring out the talent of public.
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