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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discus both view d gives your opinion.

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It is often argued that the state is squandering the capital on arts
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 of other facilities: healthcare, education and so on, which is said by some people.
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, I disagree with
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 viewpoint, because the
art
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 playing a critical role among those who are artists.
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 essay will consider the circumstances behind
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 phenomenon. Perhaps the most important cause is that it reflects the culture of a nation and enable
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 peoples' understanding of their culture and tradition.
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 means that every nation has their over culture and architecture. There are many historical buildings around the world. People go to see these buildings, as it helps to know about other cultures.
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, the article on 'The Time' published that almost 80% people travel from one place to another place in order to get information about other cultures.
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,
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 is very important among artist, it aids to bring out the talent of the people. Artists
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 as dancers, singers have lots of fans. Their shows are watched by thousands of people.
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 events provide provide employment to lots of people. Without the support of the government
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 can die down and that will lose to the country economically. It will
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 detrimental increase the unemployment rate.
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, various studies conducted that it is detrimental an issue the society, if the authorities do not pay. On the flip side, there are other things that the government has to donate the money on education, healthcare and many more. These things are still vital. Even if the state provides the capital to these provisions, they can earn money. To conclude,
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 the government should employ the money other amenities to make life simple of people,
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 is very important, which assists to bring out the talent of public.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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