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Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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Many countries rely on
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 for their survival, and it is one of the most flourishing sectors all across the globe. The world economies all around have benefited hugely from it. I certainly believe that it brings along quite a few advantages for both individuals and society. Travel has gained a lot of popularity in the past few decades, and more so, because it gives everyone a break from their monotonous routines. Exploring new places, meeting other people, and experiencing their traditions sometimes is equivalent to a therapy, for many it just rejuvenates their soul. It enriches, educates and makes one empathetic to other's cultures and languages; it may
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 bring about appreciation for the things taken for granted. Not only do the individuals gain from
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, the society benefits as a whole.
Tourism
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 creates new opportunities for employment in various industries,
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 as, hotels, tour guides, and local markets. People who run travel logs are
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 earning the livelihood by sharing their experiences about the new place. It gives governments an incentive to develop and maintain the infrastructure and preserve old heritage. Greece is one
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 country that allocates a huge budget on promoting
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.
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, some people believe that increased
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 may come at a cost of disturbed environment, waste accumulation and overwhelming use of resources.
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, during the unprecedented breakthrough of a pandemic,
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a alike novel Corona virus
, it can annihilate the
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-dependent economies. It can be concluded, that
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 has been the most desirable choice for people who like to challenge themselves and learn from their experiences out under the sun, at the same time, contributing in booming the society altogether.
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