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Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

#over-reliance #cars
Humanity’s reliance on motorised vehicles has reached levels never seen before in history. With the growth of economies around the
world
, these numbers are only going to continue to swell. I argue that pollution and the draining of
world
 resources are the most serious problems caused by
this
 trend.
Carpooling
 will be suggested as an effective response to these challenges.
Firstly
, pollution and the reduction of natural resources are major problems caused by humanity’s over-reliance on cars.
For example
, the
world
’s collective car exhaust has now dissolved the ozone and raised temperatures so much that certain island nations like Kiribati are at risk of vanishing.
In addition
 to
this
, a statistic was recently released stating that there simply is not enough steel in the
world
 to meet the demand for cars in China and India. As these examples show, humanity’s demand for motorised vehicles needs to be curbed or it will have extreme repercussions on both pollution and natural resource levels. A possible solution to the above is
carpooling
driving or forcing
compelling
. In select metropolitan cities,
for example
, reserved lanes make the practice of
carpooling
Suggestion
car pooling
 attractive, and
this
 has had substantial effects on the levels of exhaust pumped into the atmosphere every day.
For example
, it is estimated that car exhaust fumes
are
Suggestion
were
 almost 10% lower today than 5 years ago in countries that promote
carpooling
 like the UK and Canada. As
this
 shows,
carpooling
 could be a plausible solution to humanity’s overuse of
mo
a characteristic (habitual or relatively temporary) state of feeling
mood
-
torised
someone who travels for pleasure
tourist
 vehicles. Following
this
 look at the challenges of motorised vehicle demand, the urgency of
this
 situation is apparent. It is clear that something has to be done in order to reduce impact of petrol-dependent transportation. I
thus
 hope solutions
such
 as
carpooling
 lanes are put into practice in big cities the
world
 over.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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