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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The main topic shows the use of nuclear like harms in case of world war, it provides
also
 to the
energy
 as regards the costs and cleaning. In the world there are some nuclear stations giving
energy
 for each
countries
Suggestion
country
,
this
 is a good thing where it is not possible create
energy
 with alternative like wind turbines
also
 because some places do not have the resources. In fact, the use of Nuclear power is very dangerous it has to be monitored constantly or could happen what it is verified whit the explosions of Hiroshima and Nagasaky.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
 Nuclear technology
make
Suggestion
makes
 a lot of pollution and I do know if the earth could still handle
this
 for
long time
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a long time
.
On the other hand
,
Nuclear station
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a nuclear station
a Nuclear station
 at the moment it is the only alternative cheap of
energy
 productions. As regards the threat of nuclear weapons
agains
in contact with
against
 some places, I find difficult to handle because I think that in 2020 all countries should be find an alternative to discuss about eventual problems each others and should not being a blackmail to stay in peace.
For example
, I think that the
dialog
a conversation between two persons
dialogue
 to find some alternatives is the best weapon. In conclusion, I agree because nuclear power at the moment gives us the possibility to live in a world where the
energy
 it is everything, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree
to
Suggestion
with
 the use of Nuclear technology as
arm
Suggestion
an arm
 for the reasons that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
written
Suggestion
have written
wrote
 above, I know that it is simple to say and not to do because not all countries are
ables
(usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something
able
 to talk to solve problems.
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