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More and more people are opting for readymade food instead of freshly home cooked food. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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Nowadays, the hospitality industry has boomed because of the globalization, high competition in the profession, women encouragement and stressful lifestyle. Due to these reasons, the number of people buying
readymade
Suggestion
ready made
food
 has increased gradually. In my essay, I am going to shed some lights on the merits and demerits of consuming a fast
food
.
To begin
 with, at present fast
food
 has become ubiquitous in the globe and can easily be available at any corner of the world. It has major benefits as comfort and convenient. Nowadays, women are excelling their career in each and every field, due to
this
 they left with no time to cook the traditional
food
.
In contrast
, fast
food
 is easy to get and eat, which make people tend to consume a fast
food
.
Furthermore
, it
also
 boosts the economy of the country by high taxes on the
readymade
made for purchase and immediate use
ready-made
food
. For an example, in India approximate 18% of the GST has imposed on
food
 items which contributes to the economy of the nation. On the flip side, Fast
food
 has many disadvantages.
First
 of all, it is less hygienic.
Secondly
, It not only contains a high proportion of calories, but
also
 the additives to increase colour and taste of
food
, which ultimately perilous for the human health and leads to the many chronic diseases like obesity, high blood pressure and heart related issues.
Lastly
, over consumption of
readymade
Suggestion
ready made
food
 can become a cause of the deficiency of vitamins in a long run. To conclude, the disadvantages of consumption of
readymade
Suggestion
ready made
food
 outweigh the advantages. I hope that, the people understand the need of traditional
food
 and become health conscious, which
also
 fruitful to the government because of the healthy society.
Submitted by Nikita & Kash  on

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