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In many Countries, School Children are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all schools?

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Nowadays, the number of high schools which permit students to decide what to wear to
school
 are increasing.
However
, there are some positive and negative effects to why children should wear uniforms, which will be explained in details. In my opinion, I would say that
school
 uniforms should be enforced in schools.
Firstly
, wearing
school
 uniforms creates
school
 spirit in our children. It is one of the best ways to get students engaged with their studies. By getting everyone to wear the same set of clothes, schools can encourage a sense of unity, and all students would understand they are part of a common whole.
Secondly
, Wearing
school
 uniforms reduces peer pressure and discrimination on students, especially those in their teenage age that are usually under pressure both socially and academically.
For instance
,
this
 means that the students do not have to worry whether their peers think that they are dressed well or in the latest fashions.
Thirdly
,
school
 uniforms are often very cheap to afford than branded clothing. Instituting them is
thus
 a great way to help parents and the
school
 save money.
This
 is
also
 an added advantage to those families who may not be able to afford the clothes worn by those from wealthy families.
Furthermore wearing
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Furthermore, wearing
school
 uniforms will reduce bullying. By making sure everyone wears the same set of clothes, they reduce the opportunities for kids to make fun of each other based on their clothing choices.  In conclusion, Uniforms help
school
 administrators identify who is a student and who is not.
This
 makes it easier to ensure that students do not sneak into unauthorized areas.
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