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Air pollution is currently a big issue in most industrialized cities causing respiratory problems and changes in weather patterns. What do you think are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce air pollution?

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As the industrialization has grown over the years, the problem of
air
pollution
 has reached to the catastrophic level.
Moreover
,
air
pollution
 is commonly seen in most of the big cities which have caused severe health issues like respiratory problems, and major climate change.
This
 essay will elaborate on the causes of
this
 issue and would discuss appropriate measures required to overcome
this
 problem. The primary reason responsible for the
increase
 in
air
pollution
 is the
increase
 in concentration of
carbon
 content in the atmosphere. The
carbon
 dioxide level in the environment has increased because of the over-usage of fossil fuels done by the ever growing industries and the general public.
Furthermore
, CO2 is classified as a greenhouse gas, which is responsible for trapping the heat and providing it to the earth.
As a result
, the temperature all around the world has increased and severe changes in weather patterns are visible. To counter
this
 problem, the government can make certain laws which would limit the usage of fossil fuels and could
increase
 the price of petrol to minimize the
air
pollution
 done by the private transportation. Another cause of
air
pollution
 is the decrease in the number of trees around the world. As the society has industrialized, more and more trees are cut down to make space for housing and various industries. The trees help in decreasing the level of
air
pollution
 as trees absorb
carbon
 dioxide from the
air
, which is the main cause of
air
pollution
.
For instance
, a study done by the Oxford University in 2015 showed that as the number of forests and vegetation in a particular are decreased, the severity of
air
pollution
 in that place increases. A possible solution to counter
this
 issue is that a number of trees can be planted, and general awareness can be provided to the public regarding the benefits of forests. To conclude,
air
pollution
 is mainly caused due to the
increase
 in the
carbon
 content in the
air
, and the deforestation caused by the industries and individuals.
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