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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is clearly evident that most of the cultural unpaid or inexpensive community services should be an important aspect of secondary educational events. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion, mainly due to two reasons, namely
denial
Suggestion
the denial
 of certain rights to poor people and building a powerful society.
Firstly
, nowadays rich people are experiencing more comfort because of their hand in politics or family background.
This
 prevents the poor people from participating in
such
 cultural programmes hosted by school authorities.
Therefore
, it is necessary for these community services to be either inexpensive or unpaid.
This
 would allow both rich and poor people in creating a greater result.
For instance
, in India the higher secondary education minister holds tree planting sessions in each school without any fees.
Secondly
, as mentioned before, cooperation of all the students in the particular school would pave the way for a plethora of ideas and inventions needed for building a stable and strong society.
For example
, in Russia, sex education and obesity programs led by the students have been a major outbreak in many parts of the country. In conclusion, cultural and related programs should be open to all human beings-regardless of their age, gender or caste.
Moreover
, it is important to hold together the young generation for a better future.
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