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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couple having no children?

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Have you ever wondered your life without children who always run around you, wreak havoc and never hear you? Childfree is the move supported by some people from western countries, which cannot imagine their existence with petite, loud and crying mini men, while others believe that kids are an essential part of the human way. It is a controversial issue.
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 assume that the baby is our way to shift and develop future world,
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, explore the space and discover new universities. On the one hand, the descendants of the current generation will replace us in nearest future. One clear example is our existence because if parents did not meet or never think about the kids, our birthday would not happen and population of the Earth reduced to zero.
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-focusing is a widespread problem, which needs in the decision. Obviously the baby demands all of us attention and care, so either not only does not have spare time for unnecessary and empty activities but
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 is not boring at
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, these mini men are the colossal and significant component in human life.
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, no. To conclude, while one part of the planet maintains the Childfree motion, others continue to commit births, give a new baby in an eight billion world.
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, there is the motion, where people prefer to have any child,
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 in Russia. In my view anyone may choose either traditional way, including a kid, or being without ones, when I look for my own older son and younger daughter.
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