Some people think that illegal Internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

A bunch of people argues that the music industry is having an adverse
impact
by illegal downloads.
On the other hand
, the rest of them think that artists are not affected by the illegal downloads.
However
, I think that it has a minimal
impact
on artists.
This
essay will shed a light on both the views and conclude with my opinion.
Firstly
, studios and artists spend a lot of money in making of an album, it will become difficult for them to sustain if people would not pay them back.
For instance
, a song is made and it will be uploaded on
ITunes
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iTunes
, Ghana or Hungama, users are only allowed to access the song when they pay for music. But, when people
getaway
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get away
to download it illegally from
internet
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the internet
, they definitely will not pay.
Then
it will reduce the sales, which creates
financial problem
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financial problems
a financial problem
for the artist and studio.
Secondly
, it has a minimal or no effect because artists
gets
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get
handsome amount
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a handsome amount
from composers. They
also
get payments from various online platforms like YouTube.
For example
, if T series has the highest number of subscribers and its song has most viewed than YouTube will pay T series.
Moreover
, in my opinion, free downloading has no negative
impact
on
industry
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the industry
. I believe that it is a way, where fresh or new artists get recognition. They get many chances if people like their comedy, music or art.
In
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At
the conclusion,
may be
by chance
maybe
some people face problems like piracy by illegal downloads and reduction in sales. But, I still believe that it has minimal
impact
on them and its opens many ways for fresh artists who are looking for a platform.
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