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Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Globally, advancements in the fields of education, technology, science etc., has been spreading aggressively. I completely agree. Despite the fact, that the progress makes human lives more sophisticated, most of us are forgetting to live at the moment. In olden days, people used to have time to spend with their family and friends. In fact, Joint families were quite common. Globalization and urbanization lead to split of joint families into nuclear families. People are migrating to different parts of the world. To acquire premium career, education, job Etc.,
Furthermore
,
this
 physical distance has a negative effect on human relations. Resulting in mechanical life. Present generation children are more aware of their fancy gadgets
make
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makes
 and model rather than their grandparents whereabouts. It is a sinister situation that many of us need to rethink about the current situation. Nowadays medicine and research
has progressed
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have progressed
 to an extent that we can create living organisms with cloning process. It is feasible to maintain human life on machines like ventilators and prolong their survival even in their terminal illness. Humans are in a situation either to create or destroy another living organism. But what are the repercussions? Is the
man-kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
 prepared for the unforeseen circumstances that are going to arise?
Thus
, laws were made against human cloning and declared as a punishable offence. It's time for people to stop praising about the new inventions or discoveries made, and start thinking
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about
 how human emotions are being affected. In conclusion, people should not be driven by the materialistic factors, rather they should focus on their current needs.
Submitted by Pooja Sindhuri Kantepalli Venkata on

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