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Nowadays many people choice to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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The current period of
time many
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time, many
 people wants to become owner-Boss as compared to task under someone in any organization or company. There are many reasons that everyone wants to be self-employed because most of people want to
work
 with own choice in the example of coming to the office, leave office when he wants. Many people
don’t
 have the ability to
work
 under pressure,
For example
, In IT company when a software has a less
time
 to develop it,
then
 they
don’t
 have the ability to complete the development of the software in short
time
, because they become stressed about
time
 with due to it they
don’t
work
 properly. There are
also
 many drawbacks of self-employed. The person can become lazy because he works with his wish and he cannot do
work
 with confidence and nor be able to complete their task on
time
. In
this
 way he is not capable to manage their
time
 properly. There is
also
 a risk of profit and lose if someone have their own community has high rate of risk about profit as compare to
work
 with other with example, a person run their own company and he did not got project on whole month so he lose money because he spent their own money on daily expenditure if he
work
 with any organization and there was no project still he is able to get there salary. In conclusion self-employed has many benefits as compared to
work
 under hierarchy in any organization, but
its
the thing named or in question
it
also
 some disadvantages for the instant person becomes lazy, risk of profit,
don’t
 complete projects on
time
 and many more.
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