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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it’s depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to my view is success related to the attitudes of the learners. If you decide to learn anything can't stop you.
First
, learning new thing is very important for all people.
However
, it depends on many factors included in good teachers. But having a good teacher is not enough for thrive and personal attitude is vital.
For instance
, I know a well-known and knowledgeable teacher, but her all student didn't achieve academically succeed.
Second
, people should have own interest and passion for learning. Historically, Many scientists achieved success even though they hadn't been good condition. In general, I agree that people having
positive attitude
Suggestion
a positive attitude
 is
essantial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
 for reaching academic achievement.
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