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The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

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It is believed that staff is the essence of a successful business. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement and believe that it is vital to invest in grooming employees and ensure their welfare are well taken
care
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 of.
To begin
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 with, the wellbeing of employees depends a lot on their workplace environment. It is vital for
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company
Suggestion
a company
the company
companies
 to create a safe and conducive environment with adequate facilities to support their employees. It is vital to have a hazard free environment
that is
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 clean and spacious for employees to perform on their tasks. To ensure that the needs of the employees are taken
care
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 of,
for example
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, a baby room for employees who are mothers that need to bring along their children while at
work
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. Employees spent roughly two-thirds of their time at
work
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 for their
company
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.
Therefore
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,
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company
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a company
companies
the company
 can have facilities like nap pods to allow employees to catch short naps during their breaks to allow them to perform better when they get back to
work
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. Other facilities
such
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 as in-house nutritionist to take
care
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 the diet of their employees, a small game corner or a library corner. Apart from the facilities,
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company
Suggestion
companies
the company
 can invest in grooming their employees by conducting in-house training for their employees to be fully
equip
Suggestion
equipped
 with knowledge. Externally,
company
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 can relate to events planners to plan yearly field trips to reward the employees’ hard
work
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. A well-planned appraisal system is no doubt the best way to keep employees motivated,
for example
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, to have monthly best staff award.
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Company
Suggestion
The company
A company
 can
also
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 have external financial planners for their employees are not struggling financially. It is important for employees to be worry free from their personal concern to stay happy and healthy in order to be fully
devote
Suggestion
devoted
 to their
work
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 and perform in the workplace. To conclude, it is the blood and sweat of the employees that bring the success of the business.
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, it is important to take
care
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 the welfare of the employees and keep them fully
equip
Suggestion
equipages
 for the
company
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. Some companies have uniforms for their
staff which
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staff, which
 must be worn at all times. What
are
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are?
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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