In recent years, television has contributed most to changing the quality of life of ordinary people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these latter years TV has сhanged enough and bothered to improve quality of individuals’ life. I particularly can not disagree with

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statement. The reason why, if there was no television, humanity would never have been able to use and raise their imaginations of

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the thoughts

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In the early years, people were shocked by invention of

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televisions, in where images of moving of alive humanities. Even they thought, that inventors killed people,

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put in a box with a blue screen and were scared to death. All was due to being illiterate and not familiar with the highest technology.

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, by the time, humans perceived the truth and continued to be interested in different plots.

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, television became one of the greatest wonders of a modern age

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It is a means of entertainment as well as education and has a great importance in teaching science

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, there are

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educational

film companies, which devote their time to picture lives and habits of

animals insects

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animals, insects

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germs and numerous other forms of life, gives people chance to observe the secrets and creations of the world around us with

easy way

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an easy way

. Obviously, as it is not hard to get hold of comfortable lifestyle, we get used to modern technologies even it is impossible to imagine our modern life without them. To conclude that, the invention of the television raised the standard of living and the mind of people. And could get rid of illiteracy and changed their outlook on

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the world

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In recent years, television has contributed most to changing the quality of life of ordinary people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

There are more and more older people who are looking for work and have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know that it is bad for them. Why is this the cause? What measures can effectively improve people’s unhealthy eating habits?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

me countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet?

More students decided to take a part-time job when they go into universities. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?