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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures doyou think might be effective?

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Unarguably traffic and pollution are one of the drastic truth of our today's environment.Increasing the rates of
petrol
 may or may not solve the problem of traffic and pollution
.
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.
 It all depends on the situation of a place.
Further
 paragraphs will be
disscused
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discussed
disclosed
disposed
to
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in
with
 the details of these
view point
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viewpoints
viewpoint
 and
also
 a balanced approach will
also
 be discussed
.
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.
Firstly
,
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,
it is true that increasing rates of
petrol
declines the
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decline, the
decline the
 rate of traffic and
consequently
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consequent
 pollution itself.People roaming unnecessarily outside their homes on their private vehicles will
definetely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 think twice before coming out
from
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of
theire
of them or themselves
their
there
 homes due to increment in the price of
petrol
. People will more use CNG vehicles which are more
eco
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Eco
 friendly
then
petrol
 and make
oue
of or belonging to us
our
 environment more safer.
On the contrary
 part
,
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,
increment in
prices
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the prices
 of
petrol
also
 led to many problems. Whenever there is an urgent need of a
vehicle but
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vehicle, but
 due to high rates of
petrol
 vehicles are not available.
This
increses
become bigger or greater in amount
increases
increase
 the risk of many dangerous situations. To exemplify if there is a heart
attak
launch an attack or assault on; begin hostilities or start warfare with
attack
 to a person and he could not go to
hospital
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the hospital
 on time due to high prices of
petrol
. To summarize, on my part the increase in rates of
petrol
 has more cons.
thus there
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Thus, there
Thus there
 should be a normal range of price of
petrol
.
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