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People these days buy things that they do not even need. Why do you think people buy unwanted things? Will this have a positive or negative effect on individual and society? What do you think?

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These days, if it
often seen
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is often seen
 that people buy things which they do not need
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but, brought them out of nowhere. Day by day, we are becoming dependent on technology
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hence
, have made ourselves addicted to online shopping stores. In
this
 essay, I will elucidate the causes behind the
unncessary
not necessary
unnecessary
necessary
 expenses with some suitable examples.
First
 and foremost,
cost
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the cost
 of living is one of the major factors
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making people to spend
extravagently
in an abundant manner
extravagantly
.
In other words
, standard of lives is becoming better
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 and people are now choosing comfort over money.
As a result
 of
this
, sometimes most of us end up getting things which we hardly need
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For instance
, purchasing
a
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an
 expensive cell phone is totally waste of money
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,
instead
 a simple phone would work. Another point to be worth noting is
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 that society status is playing
imperative role
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an imperative role
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However
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it is having some serious detrimental
imapct
the striking of one body against another
impact
 on the style of thinking.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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