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In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern days it is common in metropolitans expanding by replacing their aged structures with newer and larger ones to adopt increasing demand in capacity. Though there are several advantages of maintaining certain older constructions, I strongly believe that the advantages of them being destroyed in order to accommodate developments are always
supersedes
Suggestion
superseded
.
Firstly
, looking into the advantages, ancient built units will always add value and helps in maintaining a
classical
Suggestion
classic
 style which always be part in representing local culture and historical architecture.
As a result
, the area will attract
tourism
. Increased arrival of
tourism
 will thrive local businesses
such
 as restaurants, hotels and other related services which ultimately helps in
economic development
Suggestion
the economic development
 of the region.
In contrast
, removing classic buildings may negatively impact in
tourism
.
However
, having older buildings will consume productive space that could have been used in constructing new housing and business complexes in taller towers
form
a giver or sender
from
 which will consume less space yet providing
large number
Suggestion
a large number
 of accommodations for residents and enterprises. Having modern apartments with latest facilities will attract residents to settle in town and will increase business to operate locally and
such
 will generate tax revenues as well as increase employment for the local skilled and unskilled labour. The positive impact for the local industries is
sustain
Suggestion
sustained
 and long lasting which are enormously greater than
tourism
. In conclusion,
although
 there are advantages
by
Suggestion
of
 maintaining certain historical units in an area with limited land availability, replacing them with efficiently spacious skyscrapers and overall advantage by doing
such
 will certainly
surpasses
Suggestion
surpass
.
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