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More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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Nowadays, it can be seen that the numbers of people are going for organic
food
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 and
workout
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. There are several advantages and positive for the human life. Many are still not attracting towards
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 beneficial development. Ways to encourage the others and specific reasons behind choosing
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 lifestyle will be explained in
this
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 essay. Many people are becoming
health
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 conscious and they are adding healthy foods to their life, along with regular exercise.
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 benefiting them in physical and mental
health
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. In
this
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 busy life, hardly individuals are getting time for the
food
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 and the proper sleep, which leads them to the mental and physical
health
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 issues. Healthy
food
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 boosts the immune system and provides essentials to the body like proteins, and vitamins
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, by doing the exercise regularly one can get better sleep, which is good for the mental
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.
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, the majority still does not attract towards healthier
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 and
workout
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. The Government can run a campaign to give awareness about the benefits of daily
workout
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 and the organic
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 that can encourage them a lot. Other news sources and internet will be helpful in spreading the words, where we can tell them about the drawbacks of choosing the fast
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 and not doing the exercise.
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, obesity is the
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 issue, which welcomes most of the dangerous diseases. To sum up, People are choosing healthy organic
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 and daily
workout
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 is a beneficial development and the government should spread the awareness to encourage the rest.
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