Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Defence forces are very important for every country. Governments are trying to get better people into structures of armies.
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free access is still closed or at least obstructed for women in many countries. Some people state that women should be allowed to all structures of defence forces on the same terms as men. In the beginning, it should be considered from a historical point of view. There is no evidence of women participating in wars until past century. In two world wars,
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, they only contribute to additional work, never in indirect hostilities. Current century hopefully not bring on any huge war, only smaller stabilisation mission and anti-terroristic operations. Only a few female soldiers had the possibility to take part in these events,
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the armies of developed countries, which overwhelm their opponents in both equipment and numbers of soldiers. These examples can suggest that women do not possess mental or physical abilities to cope with hard soldier doom.
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, in the past women were occupied by bringing up children and taking care of home. These times seem to modern people strangely as females are present in all realms of private part of the economy. A lot of women are managers and even presidents and prime ministers. Despite
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, the percentage of women in leading positions is not high. Feminist movements are trying to convince governments to impose by force equal quantity of male and female persons on leading positions in companies. But enforced solutions are any evidence of anyone's ability? One more thing to which we should pay our attention is that modern armies look completely different from those in the past. The highly technological equipment requires highly educated operators like programmers. Armies lowered their physical entry requirements for
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positions. If armies changed their admission rules, it would lead to wider access for women. In conclusion women do not have reliable evidences to trust them in severe army conditions.
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as a specialisation of armies is getting higher, admission process should specialise in the same way, what should allow women to join in the same terms as men.
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