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The bar charts show data about computer ownership, with a further classification by level of education

The bar charts show data about computer ownership, with a further classification by level of education
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The given bar graphs show data on the
percentage
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 of the year 2002 to 2010 both
by comparison
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 of total population and education level. As is observed from the given graphs,
the
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computer
ownership
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 increased over the
years
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 and
this
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ownership
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 among the
people
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 with higher studies was higher than others.
According to
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 the first graph, more than 50%
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people
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of people
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 owned
computers
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 in 2002 and
this
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percentage
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 kept on increasing over the
years
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. After 6
years
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,
thisthis
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this this
percentage
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 reached
to
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over 60% and
finally
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 in 2010 the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who owned
computers
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 reached
to
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over 70%. From the
second
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 bar graph, we can observe that the
percentage
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 of computer
ownership
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 increased with the education level; i.e. the higher the education level the higher the
percentage
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 of computer
ownership
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.
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, 15% of the
people
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 who had High school
graduation
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graduated
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 owned
computers
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 in 2002 and
this
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percentage
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were
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 about 60 for bachelor’s degree holders and over 80 for
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postgraduate degree holders. After 8
years
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, in 2010, the same trend could be observed and the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who owned
computers
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 increased significantly compared to 2002.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, ownership, years, people, computers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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