You recently had your computer fixed at the local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. In the letter describe the situation, explain why you are dissatisfied, say what you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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missive to seek your attention towards the issue of my computer's service, which left me disappointed. You would recall that I had bought a brand new Samsung computer from your store, a few weeks ago. But I found some technical problems after few days of using it and I contacted the customer service a few times in regards to

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matter, as you can understand that I cannot take any risks with my professional work with these fluctuations. But no action was taken on behalf of my complaints.

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your store a week ago with my system. They delivered it back yesterday after the service. And it's only one day and the same issue

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more than thrice. So, I am totally disappointed in your product and services provided by your store. I would like to repair or replace my personal computer as soon as possible to not

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my work. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Gagan

Submitted by Gagandeep Kaur Dhillon on Fri Jul 31 2020

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