In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Access to technology has increased significantly over two decades, and the children playing games increased too. Really in
this
plural of "this"
these
days children much hour spends front of
computer
Suggestion
the computer
computers
a computer
and
this
attractive for themselves. I am against, like many parents. With regards to the advantages, playing
computer
games can develop children’s cognitive skills.
As a result
, another good point is that when playing games, children can feel relax and have fun. In fact, they might reduce their stress when playing many popular games with vivid imagery and sound effects
for example
: Pugb, counter strike and others. These mobile and
computer
games are very famous in Uzbekistan. And games help at the same time give work with a team.
On the other hand
, these games take many hours than our plan's time.
Computer
games distracting focus on study and
this
fall we more expensive. Usually children think games frequently and speaking about levels.
Second problem
Suggestion
The second problem
is lighting normal sit in front
computer
must be 60 Sm but many times we can see children don't follow that rule, especially in game point. If games have more kill, kick, stab and shoot that impact children's character they lead to with aggressive.
Finally
, if parents tell their children "you must go sport", that help children's interested real life.
For example
: my mother is saying I only benefited things, a two years ago, she is saying I must go swimming and
this
me helped growth in height. In conclusion, there are benefits of
computer
games, but there are disadvantages too. So parents need their children to focus more. Children should play games with under control of their parents.
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