In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems?

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There is a relation between rising the average

weight

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and dropping the well being. In some areas of the world, medium

weight

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of people is growing. A lot of reasons

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as fast foods and private cars take part in

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issue.

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However fast

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foods changed our taste completely, they have bad results,

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as illness and obesity. Nowadays, fast foods are one part of our life and they take the position of traditional foods. In a study, 80% of time, people preferred to go to a fast food restaurant than a traditional one in Iran. Ingredients and the quality of that foods are not good and

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, it makes people less fit. For solving

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issue, there should be some rules about the quality of raw materials. In that way, they will be more healthy.

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, there can be some occasions like New Years Eve that people can abandon fast foods.

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the technology of cars grew in the

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decade, people now are dependent on them and don’t walk at all. In general, every family has a car and they avoid walking.

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, movement drops and it causes illness and raising the

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. If there will be a rule about using bicycles for transportation, people would work out during their commuting. In the future, there should be some penalties for who does not work out or walk at all. In conclusion, people in some countries tend to eat fast foods and abandon the exercise.

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, their

weight

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significantly rises and the state of their health and fitness decrease. Governments should regulate new laws for improving the quality of raw materials and force people to work out in some days.

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems?

Your opinion

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think government should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems to help prevent illness and diseas. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got satisfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.