In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems?

There is a relation between rising the average
weight
and dropping the well being. In some areas of the world, medium
weight
of people is growing. A lot of reasons
such
as fast foods and private cars take part in
this
issue.
However fast
Accept comma addition
However, fast
foods changed our taste completely, they have bad results,
such
as illness and obesity. Nowadays, fast foods are one part of our life and they take the position of traditional foods. In a study, 80% of time, people preferred to go to a fast food restaurant than a traditional one in Iran. Ingredients and the quality of that foods are not good and
consequently
, it makes people less fit. For solving
this
issue, there should be some rules about the quality of raw materials. In that way, they will be more healthy.
Also
, there can be some occasions like New Years Eve that people can abandon fast foods.
Although
the technology of cars grew in the
last
decade, people now are dependent on them and don’t walk at all. In general, every family has a car and they avoid walking.
As a result
, movement drops and it causes illness and raising the
weight
. If there will be a rule about using bicycles for transportation, people would work out during their commuting. In the future, there should be some penalties for who does not work out or walk at all. In conclusion, people in some countries tend to eat fast foods and abandon the exercise.
As a result
, their
weight
significantly rises and the state of their health and fitness decrease. Governments should regulate new laws for improving the quality of raw materials and force people to work out in some days.
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