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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A healthy person with
good
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a good diet
diet
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, does regular
excersice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 and avoid
stress
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 is not common
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
. Only few people follow to do
such
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 activities. But people who follow are healthy.
This
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 essay will cover, how to stay healthy with proper
diet
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, exercise and
stress
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 free
life
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. People with proper exercise and
diet
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 followers are living
thier
of them or themselves
their
life
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 healthy and happy.
Stress
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are
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is
 common
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
, in
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work place
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the work place
.So people
has
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have
are having
 to kindly avoid not to take on their mind.Because
stress
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 is the main problem to affect the body.
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,
(
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(
women
)
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)
homemakers does exercise through
work
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 which is done
regurealy
in a regular manner
regularly
 at home. A good
diet
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 should avoid
jung
the remains of something that has been destroyed or broken up
junk
 foods, outside foods, oil
containt
everything that is included in a collection and that is held or included in something
content
contains
contain
 items and having regular snakes. For men,
work
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stress
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 should be mostly avoided, it can be followed by doing the
work
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 on
daily basis
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a daily basis
.
Stress
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 will be only when we have more or
planty
a full supply
plenty
 of
work
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. Exercise has to be done
regulary
in a regular manner
regularly
 by everyone, it is good if we follow from our childhood. It gives a fresh mind to start the day. A proper
diet
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 does not only keep the person
good
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well
, his children will
also
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 follow the same and their family will be healthy.
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,
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,
stress
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 can be avoided by spending time with our family, playing with them and
open
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openly
 share talking with each other will give them a fresh mind. It is
traditionly
according to tradition; in a traditional manner
traditionally
traditional
 followed that mother's food will keep safe and healthy which can be followed. Healthy and
stress
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 free
life
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 has to be followed for every human. Pollution is
also
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 one of the main causes for
stress
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 and health issues. It will be better if we follow with one
vechile
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
 for one
family so, that
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family, so that
 we can avoid pollution
,
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,
traffic free and accident. If people follow to do the above activities, we can stay a healthy
life
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.
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