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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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At the modern time,
abortion
 has become a topic which people pay high attention and argued with others. Some of them think that
abortion
 behaviour should be protected by the law, while others hold the opposite opinions.
This
 essay will try to discuss the views from both sides and provide my personal sight base on my own experience.
To begin
 with, people insist that it is ladies' right could decide if she would give birth to a new
life
 and should not stop by any reasons
such
 as law or other political elements. What is more, if the ladies could not have proper living conditions for welcoming
this
 new
life
,
then
 it will be chaos to destroy mothers' own lives.
For example
, a girl who study in high school is pregnant for unexpected reasons,
then
 she could miss the chance for
further
 education since
abortion
 is banned by the law due to she have to foster the
baby
, even she is not ready to be a mother.
Hence
,
abortion
 could ensure women to chase a brighten future by their rights of decision-making of
abortion
.
On the other hand
, people argued that the agreement on
abortion
 is equal to the agreement of murder lives of human being.
Although
 an infant still in women's
baby
, it is no doubt that a new
life
 is born.
Therefore
, nobody, including his or her mother, could have the power to stop him or her come into the world.
In addition
, if women give up her
baby
 by
abortion
, it may loss possibilities to the contribution to the world. Any potential scientists or other high IQ experts,
for example
, may stop their journeys toward scientific explorations, so that it could cause a huge loss to the science area. In my personal opinion, I agreed that women should have their rights for alteration of
abortion
,
in particular
 ladies who do not welcome her
baby
 base on their situations.
This
 is because it is a huge amount of spending to foster a
baby
 and
this
 new
life
 could turn these mothers into economic crisis. Fortunately,
abortion
 could offer chances to solve those issues. In conclusion, the discussion of
abortion
 may never end because of
this
 topic matter between the lives and rights of human beings.
However
, I believed that women should be the person who could decide to give birth to an infant when they can guarantee the healthy and wealthy living conditions.
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