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Topic: Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what do you agree with this view?

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There are two points of view.
First
, the arts are important and it's okay to invest wealth into it.
Second
, a spending cash to
this
 "trash" is impermissible luxury. On the one hand, art and creativity are an integral part of our life. Because of it, we can freely express ourselves and be heard. So it's important to invest capital in the arts.
On the other hand
, the government can spend property for something more practical like straight roads, a pension increase and etc.
Finally
, in my opinion, people always complain, no matter what money is spent on. It will never be enough for them, since it is human essence - to want more. In conclusion, it is necessary to put money in something that brings spiritual and material value to the people. But it always will be discussed and argued with the people.
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