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The advances in air travel are focused only in first class and this seems to have left others with no benifits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
air
 travel is one of the most developed
service
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services
 in the transport sphere.
Air
 companies offer different types of seats before the flight, but prices vary. Most part of
air
 travellers cannot afford
business
class
. Some people think that
air
 plane stuff leaves economy
class
 without any benefits and all goods are used only by
business
class
. In my opinion,
that is
 only halved true and
this
 issue will be taken
to
Suggestion
into
 consideration here. It is known that millions passengers use
air
 transport every year. Tickets are not
chip
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chipped
, so each passenger expects to have a
service
accordingly
.
However
, most companies offer
distinct type
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a distinct type
 of menu and alcohol only to passengers in
business
class
, what is not fair. Those “premium” passengers paid only for comfort
seat but
Accept comma addition
seat, but
 other types of services must be provided for everybody. Anyway, usually
business
class
 travellers paid a huge amount of money not only for the seat they prefer to have premium
class
service
, which, definitely, will be significantly differed from the standard maintenance.
Moreover
, they want to drink wine from the glasses, enjoy their meal with the steel fork and knife and do not share their private space with somebody else,
that is
 why they pay twice (sometimes even more) from the price of an economy ticket.
Finally
, regardless of
class
, all people can fly comfortably, if
air
 companies provide that. They need to
extent
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extend
 a place for legs on each chair, ensure a comfortable seat and increase quality of food, and obviously, that will satisfy everybody. In conclusion, it should be mentioned, that economy
class
 in comparison with
business
class
 surely has lack of
service
, but
business
class
 pays incredible money to have a premium
service
.
Submitted by Мария Сидельникова on

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