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The advances in air travel are focused only in first class and this seems to have left others with no benifits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

#advances #air #travel #first #class #benifits
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Nowadays
air
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 travel is one of the most developed
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service
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services
 in the transport sphere.
Air
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 companies offer different types of seats before the flight, but prices vary. Most part of
air
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 travellers cannot afford
business
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class
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. Some people think that
air
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 plane stuff leaves economy
class
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 without any benefits and all goods are used only by
business
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class
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. In my opinion,
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 only halved true and
this
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 issue will be taken
to
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into
 consideration here. It is known that millions passengers use
air
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 transport every year. Tickets are not
chip
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chipped
, so each passenger expects to have a
service
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accordingly
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.
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, most companies offer
distinct type
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a distinct type
 of menu and alcohol only to passengers in
business
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class
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, what is not fair. Those “premium” passengers paid only for comfort
seat but
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seat, but
 other types of services must be provided for everybody. Anyway, usually
business
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class
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 travellers paid a huge amount of money not only for the seat they prefer to have premium
class
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service
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, which, definitely, will be significantly differed from the standard maintenance.
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, they want to drink wine from the glasses, enjoy their meal with the steel fork and knife and do not share their private space with somebody else,
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 why they pay twice (sometimes even more) from the price of an economy ticket.
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, regardless of
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, all people can fly comfortably, if
air
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 companies provide that. They need to
extent
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extend
 a place for legs on each chair, ensure a comfortable seat and increase quality of food, and obviously, that will satisfy everybody. In conclusion, it should be mentioned, that economy
class
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 in comparison with
business
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class
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 surely has lack of
service
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, but
business
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class
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 pays incredible money to have a premium
service
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.
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