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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree

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It is no doubt that reading news becomes norms of common people's life. A huge number of people still read from
trationational
 sources rather than digital media.
However
, I, personally, think that
paper
 news may be replaced by online news in the new
year coming year
Suggestion
coming year
. Reading
newspaper
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the newspaper
 has been widely
popular especially
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popular, especially
 among the older generation.They used to read it every morning, just like any other morning habits and it was the main source of
knowlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 about for those days. They got to know about current affairs, sports, entertainment and cinema everything from printed media. Old school readers hardly ever got
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to watch as
electonic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
 media was not so popular as if now.Another point about
papef
a material made of cellulose pulp derived mainly from wood or rags or certain grasses
paper
 based news is that it gives a physical form which many readers prefer to have.
However
,
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,
the new generation society prefers to have
electronic news
Suggestion
an electronic newspaper
electronic newspaper
paper
 due to its convenience.
Firstly
,
this
types
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type
 of news providers provide time bound and
uptodate
reflecting the latest information or changes
up-to-date
update
 news.People feel that they are well connected to the world and gets information, meaning real time information providing. Apart from
this
, as they carry their mobiles everywhere, they can read news anywhere and everywhere.There is no special space to keep these
news
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
paper
aince
from that time
since
once
 it is digitalised. In my viewpoint, in
this
 modern world use of electronic
news
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
paper
 will continue to grow due to
availability
Suggestion
the availability
 of internet connection everywhere and easy to use without any additional cost.
Therefore
, even though the way we read news may
changes
Suggestion
change
, still the number of readers will increase day by day.
Although
 people read more, the medium they use has been changing over
time which
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time, which
 is not only limited to traditional newspaper.
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