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You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear Smeeth, I am writing to request you to
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 my working schedule
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 a
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 in my
study
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 timetable. My name is Pramod, and I am working as a cashier at your
shop
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. My employee ID is 5151215. To tell you about the reason, I am a student of business management. There has been a
change
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 in the part-time
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 schedule at the college as exams are held next month. The college decided to add extra
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 classes for students so that students can prepare for their upcoming tests.
This
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 has led to a reduction in my working hours. The most suitable time to work at the
shop
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 is in the morning because all the extra
study
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 classes are held after 1:00 pm till late at night.
Although
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this
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change
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 might be difficult for you, it is a temporary
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 in my working hours. I will make sure that I arrive on time in the morning to open the
shop
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 so
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 will not affect the business. As I am studying sales in a business management course, it will benefit the
shop
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 to boost sales and gain more profit. I hope that you understand my situation and take my request into consideration. Yours sincerely, Pramod

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task achievement
Be slightly more specific about how the business management course will benefit the shop.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one idea for clearer structure.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal.
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The writing tone is courteous and professional.
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The letter clearly explains the reason for the request and suggests a solution.
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