Some people feel that it is wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. Others feel that there are benefits for the animals and for the humans. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your personal view.

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While some people believe all animals should be free to roam in their natural environments, there are others who believe there are good reasons to keep animals in captivity. There are valid points on both sides which I will expand on below.

Firstly

, those who believe animals should not be kept in zoos are usually of the mind that conditions in captivity are generally cruel, and that the animals would be happier if they were allowed to roam free. There are certainly numerous stories to back

this

point of view, one

such

example being the mistreatment of orca whales, as documented in the film Blackfish.

Additionally

, numerous zoos rely on animal entertainment to support their conservation efforts, and proponents of animal freedom view

this

exploitive

serving to explode or characterized by explosion or sudden outburst

explosive

and shameful.

On the other hand

, there are those who believe there are very good reasons for keeping animals in

capativity

the state of being imprisoned

captivity

, with the main reason being animal conservation. There are animals whose habitats or food sources are being destroyed, or in certain cases, those animals are actively being hunted,

such

as the African rhino. In order to prevent likely extinction, conservation and breeding programs have been established worldwide to keep at risk animals alive, with the intent on

realease

the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group

roles

once their original habitats are safe again. The other reasons for keeping animals in

captivity perhaps

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captivity, perhaps

hold less merit,

such

as providing a source of entertainment, or making animals available for those unable to travel to the animals original habitats.

Overall both

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Overall, both

sides have valid points, and my opinion is a combination of both. I believe that while certain animals require protection in a captive environment, every possible measure should be taken to ensure those animals are maintained in good health, treated with dignity, and provided with comfortable and natural enclosures.

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art and music are considred some of the fundamental elements of all societies, and some suggest that hildren should learn them at school. Do you think art and music still have a place in today;s modern wordl of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school ?

some people think that zooes are cruel and should be close down others, however beleive that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals

Task 1 The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both these views and give yourown opinion.