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Many people believe that social networking sites such as facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree

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The issue of social networking has aroused heated discussions since the very beginning of the 21st century. According to the latest survey conducted by the HSE University, the vast majority of respondents claim that the influence of
such
 online practices is of tremendous
dangerous
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danger
 to the community. Others disagree with them. Hardly can I agree with the idea that social networks can affect poorly individuals and society. The
first
 argument that needs to be mentioned is that these sites give its users an opportunity to chat distantly with friends and relatives.
Moreover
, it seems to be the only
way
 to communicate with the beloved for individuals who are to work far from their native town or home. The
second
 thing is of exorbitant political and economic value. A huge variety of online media sources
provides
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provide
 subscribers with an access to
multiple
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the multiplicity
multiplicity
 and
diverse
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diversity
 of points of view. The efficacy значимость of the information received
this
way
 can apparently lag behind that of
he
male possessive pronoun
his
 TV because users have a chance not only to get clean and unbiased data but to form own position on the problem.
Furthermore
, the content
of
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on
 social networks is much
more easy
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easier
 to produce in terms of time consuming so that it could be
way
 more relevant in comparison to the traditional one.
Nevertheless
, there is at least one significant drawback of aforementioned mechanisms. If it is overused by somebody, it will become the only
way
 of communication available for him. The skill to cooperate naturally is not inborn and must be practiced regularly in order to be applicable in daily life. People need to have a real chats and at least small talks so as to be an essential part of society. In conclusion, I believe that taking into consideration all mentioned above, despite the criticism from some social groups, the bulk of advantages of online networking can obviously overwhelm its main disadvantage and I absolutely disagree with the opinion indicated in the topic.
Submitted by Мария Сидельникова on

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